Structure of the Writing

Let's start with a very simple element, but one that rookies usually realize: The correct structure at the moment to write.

You see, how we write is a very important element. It shows our maturity, how much reading we have had along with our lives, how we provide elements like dialogues, pauses, emotions, sentiments, and thoughts...

So, what is the common mistake the rookies realize? They write with a Numerical Structure.

The Numerical Structure consists of the following example:

[Character A]: I thought we should go to the right

[Character A] tries to grab [Character B]'s left arm, but he takes a step back before talking.

[Character B]: Well, I thought we should go to the left

[Character A]: (Angry Voice) When I say right, we take right!

 Do you get the problems, right?

• Limitations: The dialogues of a character are limited to a unique space before another character talks.
  
  
• Pauses: Literally you can't pause the dialogues when you write in this way. What's the problem? Imagine 8/9 lines of dialogue, with no pause. Out of sound unnatural, because nobody talks too much without pause, the reader gets tired. Instead of reading it carefully, just take a look before pass to the next one.
  
  
• Actions: Doing this, you can't combine the action of a character with its dialogues. On scenes where there are Action scenes, that can harm the spectacularity of the scenes. A better way to describe it was using videogames: On a videogame, when the character attacks the boss, the character can talk at the same time you attack the boss. Using this structure would be like if you attack him, but each moment the character talks, the dialogue is actually a cutscene. That, but for each character, even the boss.
  
  
• Little development: "A picture is worth a thousand words", is true. But sometimes, a few words worth a thousand words. Characters receive their development through the story using not just dialogues. A simple action, some thoughts, POVs... That can mean an entire world for the worldbuilding, the character, and the reader. Doing this... Sorry to say it, but you won't see anything about that. Because when you write with a Numerical Structure, the space between dialogues must be used to move the story and scene from point A to point B.

How can I, a rookie, avoid this? 

Actually, there are ways, like keep a healthy diet of reading weekly or monthly to absorb how veteran writers decided to write their stories (Both professional writers, and amateur writers). Sometimes it's easier to learn using the mistakes of other people in our favor. 

What do you recommend to write?

A classic that rarely fails: The Between Quotation Marks one. An example using the previous one would be like:

    "I thought we should go to the right" [Character A] demanded, grabbing [Character B]'s left arm to drag him through the hallway. But before he could do anything, [Character B] took a step back, and looking to the ground, [Character B] talked.

    "Well, I thought we should go to the left." [Character B] revealed, saying his opinion with a shy voice tone. Frowning, [Character A] poked on the chest while he talked.

    "When I say right, we take right!" [Character A] said, finishing the discussion 

As you can see, we get more information about the characters with just a piece of dialogue: Personality, attitude, nonverbal language... Plus, it fixes all the listed issues: The dialogue isn't limited to a paragraph, you can distribute the dialogues on more paragraphs or interrupt them, you can mix action and dialogues, and you can give more information.

A little advice I can give (It isn't obligatory, but you can like it) is pressing the 'Tab' button on your keyboard at the beginning of each paragraph. That can help to identify where it starts and where you were reading if you lose the line.

I hope this piece of information has been useful at the moment to write and helps you to improve as a writer.

Seeing you next time.

- Mr. JaggerMeister.